Monday, June 8, 2009
news lead
Lately throughout America there is an economic recession, people are being laid off and being forced to find money any place they can. People who should have already retired are having their retirement money stripped away from the stock market and 401k's, 70 year olds and older are now having to work at places like walmart. This is mostly because of people buying houses they cant ever afford, Bush Jr. approved a bill to make real estate companies legally sell you a home you will eventually have to give up to forclosure. Also another reason is people are scared, scared to spend money to get it flowing back into circulation. Scared and pulling all of there investments in companies and stock out because the interest rates are down for a day or two. But what happens when everyone pulls their money out? The interest rates go plummeting even further into the abyss. When you take all your money back when the interest is low on stocks, you will abviously get less money, so why even do that? You might as well wait until the interest rates go up (like they allways do). If everyone didnt pull out so early, i bet that 401k's would be worth more. Consequently because of this ressesion, revenue in business is down and businesses are trying to meet the minimal requirement of the amount of people in their stores. This makes it extremely difficult to find a job, even at a fast food place.
Peer review news leads
Andy Shaefers news review.
It covers the who, what, where, why, and when, of the swine flu outbreak, spreading to minnesota. it answers the how in the second paragraph.
More details are provided.
I read everthing i needed to know about the flu, I dont have anymore questions.
There isnt much he could do to improve the article.
Cory Meyer Peer review
It says the 5 W's and the H in the first paragraph.
I think he could have said more about the rest of the team besides only a few people.
I want to know more about his position on the baseball team.
He could improve this by speaking more about himself.
It covers the who, what, where, why, and when, of the swine flu outbreak, spreading to minnesota. it answers the how in the second paragraph.
More details are provided.
I read everthing i needed to know about the flu, I dont have anymore questions.
There isnt much he could do to improve the article.
Cory Meyer Peer review
It says the 5 W's and the H in the first paragraph.
I think he could have said more about the rest of the team besides only a few people.
I want to know more about his position on the baseball team.
He could improve this by speaking more about himself.
Friday, June 5, 2009
Thursday, June 4, 2009
Editorial pre writing
1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today?
Censored T.V. that uses annoying sounds etc. to edit out bad words.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
I believe they should leave everything uncensored do to the fact that Digital cable has access to uncensored stuff and everything will be digital cable soon this year.
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
To persuade people to think that bleeping out and editing things on television generate worse thoughts then they are actually saying, and more.
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
1.Kids already know swear words
2.Digital cable will have lots on uncensored content, and parental control.
3. Bleeping noises trigger thoughts of worse words.
4.Mostly everyone swears and doesn't make a big deal out of it. Majority rules.
5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion?
Give them ideas about what they can do to prevent kids from access to these channels and pursuade them into believing and taking my side.
6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose?
Educate people on better ideas on censorship.
Censored T.V. that uses annoying sounds etc. to edit out bad words.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
I believe they should leave everything uncensored do to the fact that Digital cable has access to uncensored stuff and everything will be digital cable soon this year.
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
To persuade people to think that bleeping out and editing things on television generate worse thoughts then they are actually saying, and more.
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
1.Kids already know swear words
2.Digital cable will have lots on uncensored content, and parental control.
3. Bleeping noises trigger thoughts of worse words.
4.Mostly everyone swears and doesn't make a big deal out of it. Majority rules.
5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion?
Give them ideas about what they can do to prevent kids from access to these channels and pursuade them into believing and taking my side.
6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose?
Educate people on better ideas on censorship.
Wednesday, June 3, 2009
Editorial opinion (T.V. Censorship)
Lately I have been watching television. I was watching a show called "Room Raiders," the show where parents hate a girlfriend or boy friend and decide to pick out new contestants for their girl or boy to start dating. Then they show a corny date for each contestant desperately trying to get the girl or boy to like them and to pick them as a new girl or boy friend. For a short disturbing period of time while i was watching i kept hearing bleeps instead of "bad words" while some guy was talking trash to his girlfriends dad. Instead of thinking nothing of it every time i heard the all censoring beeping noise, I started thinking of the worst possible words that the guy could have been saying.
I noticed at one point in time that they didn't censor out the word ass, but censored out the word hole (which I noticed by a facial reading). Which got me really thinking of what he could have possibly said that was more of a swear word then ass.
In my opinion, television shows should not censor anything, just cut out absurd gestures if needed, and add a higher age limitation on certain shows with more profanity. This year every one has to switch to digital cable anyways, where there is uncensored channels already on the digital cable channels, so why not do what those channels do and put specific age restrictions. Not PG-L because there is a lot of swearing but it is beeped out. Once the kids that are not supposed to be watching shows with profanity in it learn swear words and understand they are censoring them, I'm willing to bet a majority of them will replace the bleeping noise with even more vulgar comments. For example, a man on a reality show is very upset about a cheeseburger with pickles at McDonalds because he ordered the burger "ketchup only," so angry that all you hear is, what the bleep bleep, there is bleep pickles in my bleep burger. Even a 8 year old could fill in the blanks with his favorite (or not so favorite) curses or racial slurs just because some guy was upset about a burger. If your about to censor that guy for swearing at his burger (which never happened, it was just an example), you might as well take out the whole scene. Another way of censoring shows is to take a swear word and change it into family friendly words (usually laughable different sounding voices) Example, what the heck you air head, in replacement of hell and the f word.
The opposing side of this topic has only 2 main reasons why they want things censored, because they dont want their children to hear it, which is going to happen no matter what and is irrelevant because the majority of people swear. Also another reason is they dont want to hear it, but are to stubborn to change the channel. But lets face it, if you cant handle the words, dont watch the show, it wasnt made for you anyways if you cant bear it. Just keep watching re-runs of "Seinfeld," or "Barney and friends" if your into shows that are not good and never use foul language.
Like I said before, this year everyone will be switching to digital television, which will feature channels of the most profanity your kids senstive ears will ever hear, and they can watch them over and over again for free any time on "On Demand" usually. Its like satin wispering foul langauge into their ears extending their vocabulary to unholy lengths. Maybe not, but instead of blaming the T.V. for ruining you childrens innocence that they will eventually lose anyway, you can be a real parent and check in on them to make sure they are watching appropriate shows, or with the digital cable box, block certain channels from existance (high five). So lets stop blaming the T.V. for spewing out words you dont enjoy, and place blame upon yourselfs. Bleeping out swear words generates more thoughts about swear words then if someone were to be swearing the words, ultimately making your potty mouth boys and girls say more swear words, or maybe even invent more ways to say swear words. So lets do the right thing and uncensor T.V. like it should be and place age restrictions on shows, or let the parents ban shows they deem inapropriate for their household. Just bleep do it, bleep.
I noticed at one point in time that they didn't censor out the word ass, but censored out the word hole (which I noticed by a facial reading). Which got me really thinking of what he could have possibly said that was more of a swear word then ass.
In my opinion, television shows should not censor anything, just cut out absurd gestures if needed, and add a higher age limitation on certain shows with more profanity. This year every one has to switch to digital cable anyways, where there is uncensored channels already on the digital cable channels, so why not do what those channels do and put specific age restrictions. Not PG-L because there is a lot of swearing but it is beeped out. Once the kids that are not supposed to be watching shows with profanity in it learn swear words and understand they are censoring them, I'm willing to bet a majority of them will replace the bleeping noise with even more vulgar comments. For example, a man on a reality show is very upset about a cheeseburger with pickles at McDonalds because he ordered the burger "ketchup only," so angry that all you hear is, what the bleep bleep, there is bleep pickles in my bleep burger. Even a 8 year old could fill in the blanks with his favorite (or not so favorite) curses or racial slurs just because some guy was upset about a burger. If your about to censor that guy for swearing at his burger (which never happened, it was just an example), you might as well take out the whole scene. Another way of censoring shows is to take a swear word and change it into family friendly words (usually laughable different sounding voices) Example, what the heck you air head, in replacement of hell and the f word.
The opposing side of this topic has only 2 main reasons why they want things censored, because they dont want their children to hear it, which is going to happen no matter what and is irrelevant because the majority of people swear. Also another reason is they dont want to hear it, but are to stubborn to change the channel. But lets face it, if you cant handle the words, dont watch the show, it wasnt made for you anyways if you cant bear it. Just keep watching re-runs of "Seinfeld," or "Barney and friends" if your into shows that are not good and never use foul language.
Like I said before, this year everyone will be switching to digital television, which will feature channels of the most profanity your kids senstive ears will ever hear, and they can watch them over and over again for free any time on "On Demand" usually. Its like satin wispering foul langauge into their ears extending their vocabulary to unholy lengths. Maybe not, but instead of blaming the T.V. for ruining you childrens innocence that they will eventually lose anyway, you can be a real parent and check in on them to make sure they are watching appropriate shows, or with the digital cable box, block certain channels from existance (high five). So lets stop blaming the T.V. for spewing out words you dont enjoy, and place blame upon yourselfs. Bleeping out swear words generates more thoughts about swear words then if someone were to be swearing the words, ultimately making your potty mouth boys and girls say more swear words, or maybe even invent more ways to say swear words. So lets do the right thing and uncensor T.V. like it should be and place age restrictions on shows, or let the parents ban shows they deem inapropriate for their household. Just bleep do it, bleep.
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